I am struck by the gustatory [just found that word online] imagery of "tart-sweet mornings!" I also don't often get to see an exclamation mark in poetry, and I'm enjoying this little detail.
Now, I'm imagining the feeling of a tart-sweet morning. I can sense it, but am trying to put my finger on what details it might include. Thanks for sharing this poem with us and opening up this lovely path of ideas for me, and others, to peruse.
Thank you, Bethany. I think that's something I instinctively do when "poeming": somehow I feel, even taste the words in my mouth (a kind of synesthesia experience, perhaps?).
I love the well-placed exclamation point!! (Or two. ;-) Punctuation is an especially important part of poems, seeing that there's so little on the page. Every thing counts. And sometimes it's best not to punctuate, too. Oh, the choices for the poet.
Looking forward to what you find some tart-sweet morning. With tea. :)
So interesting about how you taste the words! I, somewhat similarly, feel images in my mouth? Like, want to take a bite of a cloud? So funny when I actually type that out!
Love what you say about punctuation and how everything counts with poems.
And, see? Look at how interesting that sounds already! "Take a bite of a cloud."
I wonder if you started to try relating to experiences in this way in the future, how it might affect your writing. (I can even see: "dip my hand into a cloud," "hear the mist and mingle of a cloud," "inhale the white orchid perfume of a cloud." And so on. Even if it feels overdone at first, you could just brainstorm and then pare down.)
I am struck by the gustatory [just found that word online] imagery of "tart-sweet mornings!" I also don't often get to see an exclamation mark in poetry, and I'm enjoying this little detail.
Now, I'm imagining the feeling of a tart-sweet morning. I can sense it, but am trying to put my finger on what details it might include. Thanks for sharing this poem with us and opening up this lovely path of ideas for me, and others, to peruse.
Thank you, Bethany. I think that's something I instinctively do when "poeming": somehow I feel, even taste the words in my mouth (a kind of synesthesia experience, perhaps?).
I love the well-placed exclamation point!! (Or two. ;-) Punctuation is an especially important part of poems, seeing that there's so little on the page. Every thing counts. And sometimes it's best not to punctuate, too. Oh, the choices for the poet.
Looking forward to what you find some tart-sweet morning. With tea. :)
So interesting about how you taste the words! I, somewhat similarly, feel images in my mouth? Like, want to take a bite of a cloud? So funny when I actually type that out!
Love what you say about punctuation and how everything counts with poems.
Thank you for all this!
You're welcome. Thanks for making me smile. :)
And, see? Look at how interesting that sounds already! "Take a bite of a cloud."
I wonder if you started to try relating to experiences in this way in the future, how it might affect your writing. (I can even see: "dip my hand into a cloud," "hear the mist and mingle of a cloud," "inhale the white orchid perfume of a cloud." And so on. Even if it feels overdone at first, you could just brainstorm and then pare down.)
What beautiful ideas!
I loved "tart-sweet morning, too. And that has a different sound and flavor from "sweet-tart morning." ;-)
Somehow sweet-tart has got me in mind of pop tarts! :)
Ha, yes! And the Valentine candies. :)
This is an explosion of the senses--colors, scents, flavors ... I did have to look up "shiso."
Shiso is beautiful and delicious! (With a slight bitter edge.)
Thank you, Sandra. I do love the sense-explosion of spring. :)
such a lovely piece here, light and breezy, full of pauses for thought
"those tart-sweet mornings" has tickled my tongue and has me salivating.
Thank you so much, Danielle. :) I always view a poem as more successful when it touches us almost literally!